I thought you had a fantastic presentation Aditya, and I am jealous of your poster and business cards. You clearly spent a lot of time working on them, and they really capture the dark undertones of many of Orwell’s works. I have read Animal Farm, so I have a bit of an advantage when reading your essays since I already understand some of what you are talking about. In your 1995 AP open question prompt essay, I feel you do a very good job at directly answering the prompt. You had a clearly defined thesis, although it was not very arguable. You made several good points, and perfectly emphasized how separated and alienated John Flory feels from the society he lives in, and you did an excellent job describing how Orwell uses Flory’s alienation to mirror his own alienation, and the disgust he felt with Britain’s method of rule in India. However, your quote integration needs a little work. You just use text from the book to finish your sentences for you, instead of using them to directly support your topic sentences. You let Orwell write your sentences for you.
I was particularly interested by the way you showcased George Orwell extrapolating his own experiences into his characters. My author, Ernest Hemingway, utilized a similar approach to propagate his own viewpoints by utilizing dialogue to speak through his characters’ voices. In this essay, you specifically address the idea of Orwell using Flory as a means to convey many of the thoughts and emotions he experienced during his time in Burma. The quotes that you pulled from the prose selection I think are important in showing how Orwell thought about the British Raj. The tone evident in the quotes that you pulled align perfectly with the kind of mentality that Orwell had when it came to British colonialization that you mentioned in your presentation. This idea of an author expressing their own personal views through their characters was something I found to be true with my author as well. Hemingway, as aforementioned, spent a lot of his time characterizing his characters in ways that were often representative of his own ideals. Many of the thoughts or beliefs that Hemingway is known for, such as a strong emphasis on bravery and honor, can be clearly seen as ideals of the “Hemingway Heroes” in his works. So, like Orwell, Hemingway translates his own viewpoints into his characters. I thought it was really interesting how you brought this point to light and that I was able to see it happen with my own author.
I thought you had a fantastic presentation Aditya, and I am jealous of your poster and business cards. You clearly spent a lot of time working on them, and they really capture the dark undertones of many of Orwell’s works. I have read Animal Farm, so I have a bit of an advantage when reading your essays since I already understand some of what you are talking about. In your 1995 AP open question prompt essay, I feel you do a very good job at directly answering the prompt. You had a clearly defined thesis, although it was not very arguable.
ReplyDeleteYou made several good points, and perfectly emphasized how separated and alienated John Flory feels from the society he lives in, and you did an excellent job describing how Orwell uses Flory’s alienation to mirror his own alienation, and the disgust he felt with Britain’s method of rule in India. However, your quote integration needs a little work. You just use text from the book to finish your sentences for you, instead of using them to directly support your topic sentences. You let Orwell write your sentences for you.
I was particularly interested by the way you showcased George Orwell extrapolating his own experiences into his characters. My author, Ernest Hemingway, utilized a similar approach to propagate his own viewpoints by utilizing dialogue to speak through his characters’ voices. In this essay, you specifically address the idea of Orwell using Flory as a means to convey many of the thoughts and emotions he experienced during his time in Burma. The quotes that you pulled from the prose selection I think are important in showing how Orwell thought about the British Raj. The tone evident in the quotes that you pulled align perfectly with the kind of mentality that Orwell had when it came to British colonialization that you mentioned in your presentation.
ReplyDeleteThis idea of an author expressing their own personal views through their characters was something I found to be true with my author as well. Hemingway, as aforementioned, spent a lot of his time characterizing his characters in ways that were often representative of his own ideals. Many of the thoughts or beliefs that Hemingway is known for, such as a strong emphasis on bravery and honor, can be clearly seen as ideals of the “Hemingway Heroes” in his works. So, like Orwell, Hemingway translates his own viewpoints into his characters. I thought it was really interesting how you brought this point to light and that I was able to see it happen with my own author.